Show! Don’t tell!

Two fifth grade students were able to share their ability to add details to an existing sentence to allow the story to come alive through details creating a vivid picture.    The first student had the sentence, “This room was a mess.”    Listen to how he made the language come alive.

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The second student had the sentence, “The day was cold.”    Listen by clicking below to hear her expressive language.

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Can’t you see the messy room and feel the temperature of that cold day?